Editing Activity

~Make a list of 7 specific things that are done in the papers that you think make them an A paper.

Definitions-

1. The role of women definition had a very detailed definition.
2. The definition paper about solitary confinement being torture used a lot of examples of other types of torture for pathos.
3. The Wikileaks essay posed their opinion as a question which makes a good setup for logos.
4. The torture paper used quotes from actual inmates which helped ethos.
5. The women definition made very specific appeals to the audience (like the Disney princess reference).
6. The essay on the roles of women was placed in the correct context ("Yet a woman today struggles to maintain balance between the various ‘requirements’ of womanhood ").
7. The freedom and wikileaks paper used the OED definition at a place that flowed in the paper.

~Afterwards, list 5 specific things you think you need to integrate into you paper.

1.  I definitely need to work on the flow of my paragraphs.
2. Another thing to improve would be the organization of my topics, and making all of them connect to my main point.
3. I need to use better transitions and introduction techniques for my various examples.
4. I should describe examples more completely to help back up my claims.
5. I also need to work on my phrasing and wording of my argument.